Writing task 2:

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Jenny

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In order to be truly employable, the educated person should be able to demonstrate not just knowledge but also the ability to work independently in teams.
How can teamwork best encouraged and assessed in educational settings?

Many people generally believed that it is vital for an employee to be capable of working in team beside of their sophisticated understanding. It is true that cooperating skill is very necessary in the working environment. Thus, in the education, students should be allowed to work in groups in order to hon their team building skills.

First and foremost, students should be worked on group projects outside the school. For instance, they could go to some places like history museums on order to learn and find some information for their projects about the past while looking at some specific statues. If they were assigned to do these activities, it would gain their knowledge of the society. As students did not have to spend all day staying in a classroom, covered by four walls, they might be motivated and have more critical thinkings about many problems around them. They were able to learn many things such as how to collaborate with their team mates and have the ability to divide jobs for reach person. On the other hand, it might be difficult for the teacher to assess because they did not know exactly whether any students did not do the projects with their teams.

Furthermore, if the initiative solution was not possible, the projects could be done in both inside and outside of the school. They would be in class in several days to do the projects. By this way, teachers were easier to evaluate their students as they could be able to follow on their progresses. And students also have opportunities to ask for help in case they have some problems while doing their jobs.

In conclusion, teamwork could be necessary and assessed in the settings of education but it needs to be done in a right way.
 

englishgeek

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Many people generally believed that it is vital for an employee to be capable of working in a team beside of their sophisticated understanding. It is true that cooperating skill is very necessary in the working environment. Thus, in the education, students should be allowed to work in groups in order to hon their team-building skills.

First and foremost, students should be worked on group projects outside the of school. For instance, they could go to some places like history museums on in order to learn and find some information for their projects about the past while looking at some specific statues. If they were assigned to do these activities, it they would gain their knowledge of the society. As students did not have to spend all day staying in a classroom, covered surrounded by four walls, they might be motivated and have more critical thinkings about many problems around them. They were able to learn many things such as how to collaborate with their teammates and have the ability to divide jobs for reach person. On the other hand, it might be difficult for the teacher to assess because they did not know exactly whether any students did not do the projects with their teams it might be difficult to know if the students carried out the assignment.

Furthermore, if the initiative solutions was are not possible, the projects could be done in both inside and outside of the school. They would be in class in several days to do the projects. By In this way, teachers were easier to evaluate their students as they could be able to follow on their progresses. And students also have opportunities to ask for help in case they have some problems while doing their jobs.

In conclusion, teamwork could be necessary and assessed in the settings of education but it needs to be done in a the right way.

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I underlined sentences that don't make sense and need to be rewritten.

I think you go off-topic by talking about museums and doing projects outside of school. It seems irrelevant to the topic.