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Hermione granger

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The line graph compares the immigration rate of people coming from Asia, the UK and other regions who lived in Australia from 1976 to 2011.

Overall, the proportion of immigrants in Australia witnessed a downward trend, albeit slightly during most of the period, except for the last ten years. In addition, a variety of changes can be seen in the figures for each region throughout the period.

Starting at almost 23 percent in 1976, the immigration rate in Australia decreased gradually to only 20 percent of total population in 2001 before rising noticeably to 25 percent in the last year surveyed. Meanwhile, the figures for the immigrants from the UK, standing at the highest place in the first year at 15 percent, fell steadily throughout the period shown to only 5 percent in 2011, being the lowest figures in the same year.

By contrast,it is obvious that Australia gained popularity among Asian immigrants, the evidence of which can be seen in the significant rise of immigration, from only a trivial 3 percent in the first year to almost 5 times higher by the end of the period, surpassing other regions to become the largest immigrant in that country. Meanwhile, the figures for other regions besides the UK and Asia generally shared the same pattern with an upward trend, albeit slightly during the same period, from 11 percent to 13 percent.
 

englishgeek

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The line graph compares the immigration rates of people coming from Asia, the UK and other regions who lived in Australia from 1976 to 2011.(1)

Overall, the proportion of immigrants in Australia witnessed a downward trend, albeit slightly during most of the period, except for the last ten years. In addition, a variety of changes can be seen in the figures for each region throughout the period.

Starting at almost 23 percent in 1976, the immigration rate in Australia decreased gradually to only 20 percent of total population in 2001 before rising noticeably to 25 percent in the last year surveyed. Meanwhile, the figures for the immigrants from the UK, standing at the highest place in the first year at 15 percent, fell steadily throughout the period shown to only 5 percent in 2011, being the lowest figures in the same year.

By contrast ,it is obvious that Australia gained popularity among Asian immigrants, the evidence of which can be seen in with the significant rise of immigration, from only a trivial 3 percent in the first year to almost 5 times higher by the end of the period, surpassing other regions to become the largest proportion of immigrants in that country. Meanwhile, the figures for other regions besides the UK and Asia generally shared the same pattern with an upward trend, albeit slightly during the same period, from 11 percent to 13 percent.

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(1) I think you could also say "who were living in Australia".

Good job, well done!