Task 2:Nowadays young people don't spend their weekends or holidays doing outdoor activities in natural environments.What's the reason for this?

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Huyen Cao

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Nowadays young people don't spend their weekends or holidays doing outdoor activities in natural environments (e.g. hiking, mountain climbing). What's the reason for this? What can be done to encourage them to do so?

In contemporary days, young generations tend to spend less and less time on outdoor activities such as hiking and mountain climbing. This essay will argue that the possible reason for this negative trend is that children are getting addicted to using the internet namely online games and social media, and it will also suggest several potential remedies to solve this matter.

Technology is the main culprit to blame for causing children not to play outside. According to recent studies, the majority of young people have a tendency to use most of their spare time inside of the house to play computer games or using social platforms like Facebook, Youtube, etc. For instance, my niece was Tiktoker when she turned 7 years old, and she spent days and nights making videos. In other words, excessive screen time is possibly the reason that affects children’s playtime outside.

There are a number of methods parents and schools can do to encourage their children to play outside of the house. Firstly, schools can organize more camping holidays or competitions such as running, and treasure hunt and so on to attract their students to join in. Furthermore, parents should spend more time having fun with their sons and daughters outside and help their offspring develop a habit of enjoying their spare time with nature instead of sitting in front of a computer. Take my sister as an example, she always tries to take her daughter out for some cardiovascular workout in the early morning to encourage her daughter to go outside more often.

In conclusion, young generations do not spend their leisure time doing hiking, mountain climbing, and other outdoor activities because of being addicted to using technology, however, parents and schools can get children to involve more in those hobbies by creating more opportunities for them to enjoy and get used to being outside.

Please support me to correct the grammatical mistakes in this essay, and can you tell me if there is any problem with my words choice. Thank you for your hard work <3 <3 <3
 

englishgeek

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In contemporary These days, the young generations tends to spend less and less time on outdoor activities such as hiking and mountain climbing. This essay will argue that the possible reason for this negative trend is that children are getting addicted to using the internet namely online games and social media, and it will also suggest several potential remedies to solve this matter.

Technology is the main culprit to blame for causing children not to play outside. According to recent studies, the majority of young people have a tendency to use most of their spare time inside of the house to play computer games or using social media platforms like Facebook, Youtube, etc. For instance, my niece was Tiktoker when she turned 7 years old, and she spent days and nights making videos. In other words, excessive screen time is possibly the reason that affects children’s playtime outside.

There are a number of methods parents and schools can do to encourage their children to play outside of the house. Firstly, schools can organize more camping holidays or competitions such as running, and treasure hunts and so on to attract their students to join in. Furthermore, parents should spend more time having fun with their sons and daughters outside and help their offspring develop a habit of enjoying their spare time with nature instead of sitting in front of a computer. Take my sister as an example, she always tries to take her daughter out for some cardiovascular workout in the early morning to encourage her daughter to go outside more often.

In conclusion, young generations do not spend their leisure time doing hiking, mountain climbing, and other outdoor activities because of being addicted to using technology. However, parents and schools can get children to be involve more in those hobbies by creating more opportunities for them to enjoy and get used to being outside.

Feedback

Your essay was well written. Good job. I did have a bit of trouble with your phrase "young generation". I don't think we would use that.

You could say something like "This generation's youth..." You could also refer 'young people' as teenagers.

I hope this helps.