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sabita thapa

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The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The table compares the proportion of women participated in top-level position in Elden, Bamforth and Finsbury companies from 1975 to 2015.

Overall, Finsbury had the highest percentage of women in senior management position at the beginning and fluctuated every year, which was overtaken by Elden Ltd in the final year with significant raised in the number. There was slight changes in the percentage of women in Bamforth.

In Finsbury, the highest percentage of women occupied the top ranked position with 16% in 1975, which declined by 2% in 1980 and 1% in 1885 before increased to 22% in 1990 and then became one fourth in the final year.

Elden had the lowest number of women in senior level position in 1975 and 1980 with 3%, which increased significantly in 1985 with 14%. The number doubled in 1990 and reached the peak in 2015 with 64% to maintain the highest proportion. The situation was less remarkable in Bemforth where the number started with 9% in 1975, which increased by 2% in every year and maintained the second highest position with 46% in the year 2015.
 

englishgeek

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The table compares the proportion of women who participated in top-level positions in Elden, Bamforth and Finsbury companies from 1975 to 2015.

Overall, Finsbury had the highest percentage of women in senior management positions at the beginning and which then fluctuated every year, which it was then overtaken by Elden Ltd in the final year with a significant raised increase in the number. There was were slight changes in the percentage of women in Bamforth.

In Finsbury, the highest percentage of women who occupied the top ranked position with was16% in 1975, which then declined by 2% in 1980 and 1% in 1885 before increasing to 22% in 1990 and it then became one fourth in the final year.

Elden had the lowest number of women in senior level positions in 1975 and 1980 with 3%, which increased significantly in 1985 with to 14%. The number doubled in 1990 and reached the peak in 2015 with 64% to maintain the highest proportion. The situation was less remarkable in Bemforth where the number started with 9% in 1975, which then increased by 2% in every year and maintained the second highest position with 46% in the year 2015.

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My feedback is similar to your other essay, try to give a more general summary of the information.