Some people believe that the government should provide free education and healthcare for the citizens. However, others think people should pay for the

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Trung

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Some people think that government should provide education for free on all levels: primary, secondary and tertiary Others believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to pay for their own tertiary education.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.


It is generally believed that local inhabitants are able to get the financial aid by giving them freedom in educational and medical fields from authorities, while some people claim that it is necessary for humans to pay extra fees for those circumstances. I am totally agree with the later that those systems need to be charged for some reasons below.

To begin with, there are heaps of benefits that citizens can be inherited from free activities. First of all, this positive trend tends to lend a helping hand to the impoverished and less fortune people in the society. Therefore, it will alleviate the financial burden for each household and they are willing to spend their tight budget on other demands such as: food, shelter and clothing. Besides, it is a positive signing that costless systems are being applied in nations due to the higher scops for learning and healthcare that lead to a dramatic fall of literacy rate and diseases. To cite an example, thanks to the supporting of government, Norway is one of the countries having a greater life expectancy up to 82 years old.

On the other hand, another factor that worth mentioning is that schools and hospitals really need the amount of money for maintaining and updating the facilities as well as operating expenses. The standard of those environment go down day by day and whether with non-profit, how it will become. In addition, if there are too much supports, humans may get used to being lazy and relying on the government. Thus, they may feel that it is not necessary to work hard to earn much money and it can cause social anarchy.

Take everything into consideration, despite some upsides in free services, it is much better for people in cities to put a payment for medical and educational sectors

Please help me to correct and give some feedbacks. Thank you
 
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It is generally believed that local inhabitants are able to get the financial aid by giving them freedom in educational and medical fields from authorities, while some people claim that it is necessary for humans to pay extra fees for those circumstances. I am totally agree with the later, that those systems need to be charged for some reasons which I will outline below.

To begin with, there are heaps(1) of benefits that citizens can be inherited from free activities. First of all, this positive trend tends to lend a helping hand to the impoverished and less fortune people in the society. Therefore, it will alleviate the financial burden for each household and they are willing to spend their tight budget on other demands such as: food, shelter and clothing. Besides, it is a positive signing that costless systems are being applied in nations due to the higher scope(?) for learning and healthcare that lead to a dramatic fall of in literacy rates and diseases. To cite an example, thanks to the supporting of government, Norway is one of the countries having a greater life expectancy of up to 82 years old.

On the other hand, another factor that is worth mentioning is that schools and hospitals really need the amount of money for maintaining and updating the facilities as well as operating expenses. The standard of those environment go down day by day and whether with non-profit, how it will become. In addition, if there are is too much supports, humans may get used to being lazy and relying on the government. Thus, they may feel that it is not necessary to work hard to earn much money and it can cause social anarchy.

Taking everything into consideration, despite some upsides in free services, it is much better for people in cities to put a payment pay for medical and educational sectors.

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(1) Heaps is very colloquial or informal.

Some of the synonyms you have tried to use do not sound natural or appropriate. Humans for example does not necessarily substitute 'people'. Costless is another one, which it seems you have tried to substitute it with free. While costless can mean free, I can't remember seeing it anywhere. So be careful using synonyms which you don't know the correct usage of.