People are having more and more sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons? What are the solutions to make people drink less?

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Minh Nguyen

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People are having more and more sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons? What are the solutions to make people drink less?

It is true that nowadays, the rate of people at risk of obesity and diabetes is increasing because people are inactive and their consumption of sugar based drinks in a year is a lot, and this is leading to a general decline in people’s health. There are also a few solutions that may decrease the number of people comsuming soft drinks
On the one hand, one of the main reasons behind the high rate of drinking sweet drinks is soft drinks are a very popular consumption product all over the world when everyday its image appears on television, social networks or even any website on the internet has great popularity. Therefore, it attracts a large number of customers to buy products and quickly popularizes in people’s lives, especially young people, even if they have harmful impact to their health. Secondly, the reason of taking more sugar based drinks is due to the changing life style of people when in the modern life, people are likely fast food with soft drink, which is more convenient with them in every meal. In addition, young people prefer to use the soda drinks when they meet up with their friends or in every celebrity
On the other hand, one can eliminate the habit of consuming sugar based drinks by some of these solutions. First of all, people should develop their habit of reading the contents about the harmful and the bad impact soft drink could destroy their health. This could be encourage them to find alternative drinks. Secondly, government should guild people about the advertisement and contents about alternative drinks which will be good for their health and aware them the negative sides of the products have a high sugar content
In conclusion, the habit of drinking sugar based drinks of people would not change quickly but government should take steps to propagate and warn citizens about the dangers of drinking too much soft drink
 

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It is true that nowadays, the rate of people at risk of obesity and diabetes is increasing because people are inactive and their consumption of sugar based drinks in a year is a lot(1), and this is leading to a general decline in people’s health. There are also a few solutions that may decrease the number of people consuming soft drinks.

On the one hand, one of the main reasons behind the high rate of drinking sweet drinks is that soft drinks are a very popular consumption product all over the world when everyday its image appears on television, social networks or even any website on the internet which is popular. has great popularity. Therefore, it attracts a large number of customers to buy products and quickly popularizes them in people’s lives, especially young people, even if they have a harmful impact to their health. Secondly, the reason of taking consuming more sugar based drinks is due to the changing lifestyle of people when in the modern life, people are likely fast food(2) with soft drink, which is more convenient with them in every meal. In addition, young people prefer to use the consume soda drinks when they meet up with their friends or in every celebrity(3)

On the other hand, one can eliminate the habit of consuming sugar based drinks by some of these solutions. First of all, people should develop their a habit of reading the contents about the harmful and the bad impact soft drink could destroy their health. This could be encourage them to find alternative drinks. Secondly, government should guild(4) people about the advertisement and contents about alternative drinks which will be good for their health and make them aware them of the negative sides aspects of the products which have a high sugar content

In conclusion, the habit of drinking sugar based drinks of people would will not change quickly but governments should take steps to propagate and warn citizens about the dangers of drinking too much soft drink.

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Good job, not bad. Just a few words which seem incorrect. You raised some valid points and your structure is good.

(1) I would avoid using 'a lot'. There are many alternative words to use: https://www.entrepreneur.com/article/240041

(2) It seems like you are missing a verb here.

(3) What do you mean by celebrity?

(4) What do you mean by guild?
 

Minh Nguyen

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Sep 30, 2021
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1
It is true that nowadays, the rate of people at risk of obesity and diabetes is increasing because people are inactive and their consumption of sugar based drinks in a year is a lot(1), and this is leading to a general decline in people’s health. There are also a few solutions that may decrease the number of people consuming soft drinks.

On the one hand, one of the main reasons behind the high rate of drinking sweet drinks is that soft drinks are a very popular consumption product all over the world when everyday its image appears on television, social networks or even any website on the internet which is popular. has great popularity. Therefore, it attracts a large number of customers to buy products and quickly popularizes them in people’s lives, especially young people, even if they have a harmful impact to their health. Secondly, the reason of taking consuming more sugar based drinks is due to the changing lifestyle of people when in the modern life, people are likely fast food(2) with soft drink, which is more convenient with them in every meal. In addition, young people prefer to use the consume soda drinks when they meet up with their friends or in every celebrity(3)

On the other hand, one can eliminate the habit of consuming sugar based drinks by some of these solutions. First of all, people should develop their a habit of reading the contents about the harmful and the bad impact soft drink could destroy their health. This could be encourage them to find alternative drinks. Secondly, government should guild(4) people about the advertisement and contents about alternative drinks which will be good for their health and make them aware them of the negative sides aspects of the products which have a high sugar content

In conclusion, the habit of drinking sugar based drinks of people would will not change quickly but governments should take steps to propagate and warn citizens about the dangers of drinking too much soft drink.

Feedback

Good job, not bad. Just a few words which seem incorrect. You raised some valid points and your structure is good.

(1) I would avoid using 'a lot'. There are many alternative words to use: https://www.entrepreneur.com/article/240041

(2) It seems like you are missing a verb here.

(3) What do you mean by celebrity?

(4) What do you mean by guild?
Thank you so much