IELTS Writing Task-2 (Please evaluate my essay)

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Faysal

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The natural resources such as oil, forests and fresh water are being consumed at an alarming rate. what problems does it cause? how can we save these problems?

In technological era with increasing population in the world and rapid growth of industries, people use more natural resources such as oil, water and forest. But these resources are limited and demanding and consumption is very high. There are many adverse effects on this problem, but if timely steps are taken this problem can be addressed.

To begin with, oil is main energy sources and it is known as non-renewable . It will finish very soon because its demand very high. Oil is used in vehicle, industries, factories and also in home. At industrial level we can use more public transport so definitely we use more oil resource. People are more educated so they can do some research and find alternate sources of energy it will benefit in future.

Secondly, water is main element for all. There can be no life without water . water is most precious thing today. Fresh water level use of water continuously and recycle water whenever possible. Because all machines become hot so water will helpful for cooling down. Water is used in growing plants and tress.

Finally , because of deforestation, many plants and animals are decreasing day by day. Animals and plants, which provides us food, medicine and other valuable products but they are facing extinction. We have also loose bio-diversity. Moreover, many city expanding the areas so many forests area's tress cut, so soil exposed to heavy rain and also washed away. Trees absorb carbon dioxide and it is very dangerous because it causes global warming. Government will take some actions and take some strict rules for cutting tress. Also human can grow some tress in area for few months and years so that day is not far when we will have greenery in all over.

To recapitulate, I would like to say oil, water, and forests are very much demand and necessary. If we have to survive on earth so we use them very carefully for our better future.
 

englishgeek

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In this technological era, with an increasing population in the world and the rapid growth of industry, people use more natural resources such as oil, water, and forests. But However, these resources are limited (and demanding -- I am not sure what you mean by this) and consumption is very high. There are many adverse effects on this problem, but if timely steps are taken, this problem can be addressed.

In this modern era, with an increasing global population and growing demand in consumption, natural resources, such as oil, water, and timber are in diminishing supply. The pressure on these natural resources is high, creating a range of problems, if not addressed soon, will only worsen in the future.

To begin with, oil is one of the main energy sources and it is known as a non-renewable resource. It will finish very soon because its demand is very high. Oil is used in vehicles, industries, factories, and also in homes. At industrial level we can use more public transport so definitely we use more oil resource. People are more educated so they can do some research and find alternate sources of energy it will benefit in future.

Secondly, water is main element for arguably the most important resource of all. There can be no life without water; water is the most precious thing today. Freshwater level use of water continuously and recycle water whenever possible. Because Since all machines become hot, so water will is helpful for cooling them down. Water is used in needed for growing plants and trees.

Finally, because of deforestation, many plants and animals are decreasing day by day. Animals and plants, which provides us with food, medicine, and other valuable products but they are facing extinction. We have are also losing bio-diversity. Moreover, many cities are expanding, the areas so many forests area's tress cut are destroyed, so soil is exposed to heavy rain and also washed away. Trees absorb carbon dioxide and it is very dangerous because it causes global warming. Governments will take some actions and take make some strict rules for cutting trees (spelling!). Also humans can grow some trees in area for few months and years so that day is not far when we will have greenery in all over.

To recapitulate, I would like to say oil, water, and forests are very much in demand and necessary. If we have tTo survive on earth so we need to use them very carefully for our better future.