IELTS Task1: Kindly evaluate. Thanks

[irfan334590]

The given below pie charts provide the data of the world’s population distribution, resource consumption, and expenditure ratio. The major portion of the resources are consumed by the USA and Europe, while their population is almost half than the Asia continent; however, double than continent Africa and other regions of the world. Most of the world wealth is spent by people on other means, whereas 60 percent for purposes of food, clothing, transport, housing and clothing. Amongst food, housing, transportation and clothing, least money is spent on clothing while maximum on food, which is 24 percent.

The world 60 percent of resources are used by the USA and Europe, while their population is only 28%. Although most people live in Asia, Africa and other regions of the world, only 40 percent of the world wealth is used by these countries’ people. In comparison, America and Europe population is 14 percent each but have the highest portion of the world resources.

 

[englishgeek]

The given below pie charts provide the data of the world’s population distribution, resource consumption, and expenditure ratio. The major largest portion of the resources are consumed by the USA and Europe, while their population is almost half of than the Asia continent; however, double than continent Africa and other regions of the world. Most of the world's wealth is spent by people on other means items, whereas 60 percent for purposes of food, clothing, transport, housing and clothing. (You should first talk about the items that have percentages first, and what the figure for 'other things' towards the end.) Amongst food, housing, transportation and clothing, the least money is spent on clothing while maximum on food, which is 24 percent.

The world 60 percent of resources are used by the USA and Europe, while their population is only 28%. Sixty percent of the world's resources are used by the USA and Europe, even though they have just 28 percent of the global population. Although most people live in Asia, Africa and other regions of the world, only 40 percent of the world's wealth is used by these countries’ people. In comparison, America and Europe's population is 14 percent each but have the they consume the highest portion of the world resources.

 

[englishgeek]

I would just like to mention if you are talking about a graph that has a percentage marked "others" you should be talking about that at the end of the sentence.

I would say something like:

"Looking at how people spend money around the world, 24 percent is spent on food, 18 percent on transport , 12 percent on housing, 6 percent on clothing and 60 percent on other items not specified in the graph."

 

[irfan334590]

Okay. Thanks!