do you think it is good to push students to study hard in their youth

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Dungngocnguyen

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high expectations for children are nothing new in today's society. it is argued that forcing them to put more effort into studying while they are young is likely to benefit them later in life. in my judgment, I disagree with this view. the first and the foremost reason is that: disciples of all ages need to have fun and relax after a hard day at school. in particular, some of them may undergo a period of depression and anxiety due to the great pressure from teachers and parents. furthermore, learning too much can be counterproductive because it can have harmful effects on the psychological health of young children. the force from improving and maintaining high-level performance can lead to many mental issues such as anxiety or depression. in these cases, parents' pressure on teenagers won't get them to accomplish a better level at school and put them in danger. the balance between learning and relaxation plays an extraordinary part in encouraging young people to maintain their interest in studying. if children follow a strict education schedule, they will become rote apprentices who lose their critical thinking. moreover, rote learning is not conducive to their performance at school. another fact to note is that: except for studying, children need to participate in different activities such as competitions and social performances. by doing so, they can circumvent agonizing many ailments especially obesity and diabetes. for occurrence, running is considered to be an adequate way to keep robust, improve physical health, and diminish stress from a school environment. from what has been discussed, studying hard not only brings a lot of harms and unenthusiastic effects to students but it is necessary to achieve our goal. However, the balance between study and relaxation should be considered in equal measure.
 

englishgeek

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Setting high expectations for children are is nothing new in today's society. It is argued that forcing them to put more effort into studying while they are young is likely to benefit them later in life. In my judgment, I disagree with this view. The first and the foremost reason is that: disciples young people of all ages need to have fun and relax after a hard day at school. In particular, some of them may undergo a period of depression and anxiety due to the great pressure from teachers and parents. Furthermore, learning too much can be counterproductive because it can have harmful effects on the psychological health of young children.

The force from improving and maintaining high-level performance can lead to many mental issues such as anxiety or depression. In these cases, parents' pressure on teenagers won't get them to accomplish a better level at school and put them in danger. The balance between learning and relaxation plays an extraordinary part in encouraging young people to maintain their interest in studying. If children follow a strict education schedule, they will become rote apprentices who lose their critical thinking. Moreover, rote learning is not conducive to their performance at school. Another fact to note is that: except for studying, children need to participate in different activities such as competitions and social performances. By doing so, they can circumvent agonizing many ailments especially obesity and diabetes. For occurrence example, running is considered to be an adequate way to keep robust fit, improve physical health, and diminish stress from a school environment.

From what has been discussed, studying hard not only brings a lot of harms and unenthusiastic effects to students but it is necessary to achieve our goals. However, the balance between study and relaxation should be considered in equal measure.

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Dungngocnguyen

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thank you for your feedback
the question is: do you think it is good to push students to study hard in their youth
I might need the score for each criterion of IELTS writing
 
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englishgeek

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Try to learn about basic structure and punctuation.

Introduction ..

Paragraph 1 ..

Paragraph 2..

Conclusion...

Even on this forum, try practicing your writing by starting every sentence with a capital letter. It will just become a habit after a while.

Practice another essay with these points in mind and I will give you a score. If you don't follow these basic things you may not get higher than a 5.