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marii

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International travel may sometimes make people prejudiced rather than broad minded. What may be the reasons for this? What can people do to improve their understanding of the countries they visit?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

Nowadays an increasing number of people decide to take a trip to get to know new places and new people. Even though travelling is considered to be vital in order to discover new cultures, sometimes it makes people prejudiced against a certain country. There could be several reasons for this mentality and giving viable solutions can help to resolve the issue.

Firstly, due to the various commitments that people may have, many more tourists decide to stay in a country for a limited period of time. As a result, they cannot get an idea of the place and base their opinion of the place only on what they have read in social media or on the internet. As a matter of fact, it is well known that you start to learn and appreciate the culture of a certain country if you spend at least 2 weeks there. Secondly, overgeneralizing is another triggering factor of the biases of international travellers. For instance, it may occur that during a trip one may meet an unfriendly or rude local person, but this does not mean that local people are really all like that. Furthermore, individuals should be able to be open minded in order to understand the mindset of the city dwellers of a certain country. By doing so, tourists can understand what prompted a local person to behave in a way that seems rude to tourists and they can try to see if they may unknowingly have showed disrespect for local culture. For example, a common mistake would be not to take off one's shoes in some religious places or temples.

However, there are few solutions that can help travellers to be more receptive and indulgent instead of cold and biased. First of all, travellers should make a thorough research on the typical customs and traditions of that country prior to the trip. In addition, the government should encourage tourists to stay longer in his own country by promoting activities for tourists which would allow them to discover not only the beautiful monuments and landscapes that a country may offer, but also the mindset and the culture of the inhabitants of the place.

To conclude, by implementing the solutions above, it might probably reduce prejudice of the public. If tourists have a positive attitude towards a certain country, they are more likely to return to that country and by doing so, they boost its economy.
 

englishgeek

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Nowadays an increasing number of people decide to take a trip to get to know new places and new people. Even though travelling is considered to be vital in order to discover new cultures, sometimes it makes people prejudiced against a certain country. There could be several reasons for this mentality and giving viable solutions can help to resolve the issue.

Firstly, due to the various commitments that people may have, many more tourists may decide to stay in a country only for a limited period of time. As a result, they cannot get a good idea of the place and base their opinion of the place only on what they have read in on social media or on the internet. As a matter of fact, it is well known that you start to learn and appreciate the culture of a certain country if you spend at least 2 weeks there. Secondly, overgeneralizing is another triggering factor of the biases of international travellers. For instance, it may occur that during a trip one may meet an unfriendly or rude local person while traveling, but this does not mean that local people are really all like that. Furthermore, individuals should be able to be open-minded in order to understand the mindset of the city dwellers of a certain country. By doing so, tourists can understand what prompted a local person to behave in a way that seems rude to tourists and they can try to see if they may unknowingly have shown disrespect for towards the local culture. For example, a common mistake would be not to take off one's shoes in some religious places or temples.

However, there are a few solutions that can help travellers to be more receptive and indulgent instead of cold and biased. First of all, travellers should make a thoroughly research on the typical customs and traditions of that country prior to the trip. In addition, the government should encourage tourists to stay longer in their own country by promoting activities for tourists which would allow them to discover not only the beautiful monuments and landscapes that a country may offer, but also the mindset and the culture of the inhabitants of the place.

To conclude, by implementing the solutions above, it might probably reduce prejudice of the public. If tourists have a positive attitude towards a certain country, they are more likely to return to that country and by doing so, they boost its economy.

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Good job overall, well done. Well structured, good range of vocabulary with a few grammatical errors.